高考英语读后续写练习：学骑自行车与兄弟情谊

高考英语读后续写练习：学骑自行车与兄弟情谊

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高考英语读后续写语篇练习学骑自行车：难忘的成长与兄弟情转变

1. 题目分析
2. Part1题目呈现
3. 续写原文
   One of my teachers once asked my class what our favorite memory was. She was asking for the moment in which “you felt the best, you felt that you had the world in the palm of your hand.” Some described grand awards; others described winning a tournament. But I felt the best when I first learned how to ride my bike at thirteen. I didn’t mind my classmate’s stares and snickering, because I knew there was more to the story.

My brother and I shared a typical brotherly relationship: we couldn’t stand each other. Or to be honest, he couldn’t stand me. I hero-worshipped him. My clothes mysteriously looked like his, and even my words tended to mimic those I heard from him. Many times, I even wanted to literally follow my brother, sobbing every time I was prevented from hanging around with him. Needless to say, I was an annoyance to him. Any sort of conversation we had usually degraded to fighting, and try as I might, my brother usually won.

4. 续写原文
   After a while, I stopped trying to impress him and learned to be totally indifferent; perhaps the silent treatment would get more approval. I was wrong. We soon fell into a sad pattern—I avoided him, he ignored me, and deep inside, it hurt. Indifferent or hostile, he was only a brother in name. So that’s how it was between us. I believed we would forever be apart, two housemates without conversation, two strangers without warmth. And nothing more.

I still remember the day I learned to ride a bike. I had received it that Christmas, which was great, until I realized I had no idea how to ride it. My mom was too busy and had long since abandoned any attempt to teach me. I decided to teach myself to ride, a little bit each day, but in vain. On that fateful day, it was no different. I was coming to the end of my daily one-hour torture, and I was so frustrated that I threw my bike aside and began to cry.

5. 段首句
   Para1: I guess that was what caused my brother to come outside.
   Para2: An hour later, I was showing off my riding skill to my mom.

6. Part2题目分析

7. 续写原文分析

8. 主题围绕着作者学骑自行车的经历以及与哥哥关系的变化展开。核心事件包括回忆老师询问最喜欢的记忆，引出自己学骑自行车的经历，同时讲述与哥哥之间从崇拜、矛盾到关系转变的过程。

点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。

情节构建的重点
9. 续写思路分析
Para1: I guess that was what caused my brother to come outside.
情节触发点：作者在学骑自行车过程中因不断失败而崩溃大哭，这一行为吸引了哥哥的注意，导致哥哥来到外面。此情节是前文作者与哥哥紧张关系的转折，哥哥之前对作者多是厌烦、忽视，此时他的出现打破了两人之间的僵持局面，为关系的改善埋下伏笔。

可能的情节发展方向：哥哥看到哭泣的作者后，态度发生了转变，不再冷漠，主动提出教作者骑自行车。他帮助作者扶起自行车，耐心地指导作者如何保持平衡、踩踏踏板等，在哥哥的帮助下，作者逐渐掌握了骑车技巧，这一过程体现了哥哥对作者的关心，使两人关系开始缓和，从敌对走向合作。

10. 续写思路分析
    Para2：An hour later, I was showing off my riding skill to my mom.
    情节发展：经过哥哥的指导和作者的努力练习，一个小时后作者已经能够熟练地骑自行车，于是向妈妈展示自己的新技能。这表明作者在短时间内取得了很大的进步，同时也突出了哥哥教学的成效。作者的心情从之前的沮丧转变为自豪，这种情绪的变化反映了他在学会骑车后的成就感。

人物关系变化及意义：在这个场景中，妈妈作为见证者，看到作者的成长和变化，为作者感到高兴。而作者与哥哥之间的关系通过这次共同经历得到了进一步的升华，他们之间不再是冷漠和敌对，而是有了温暖和互助，作者对哥哥的感激之情也在这一刻得到体现，这种积极的关系变化对作者的成长有着重要意义，让他感受到了亲情的力量，也为他未来的生活带来积极影响。

11. 续写情节发展
    情节发展
    作者努力自学骑自行车但未成功，妈妈因忙碌放弃教他，这让作者陷入困境，也体现其在成长中面临的挫折。在一次练习失败后，作者崩溃大哭，这一情绪低谷推动情节发展，吸引哥哥出来。

情节转折（I guess that was what caused my brother to come outside.相关情节）
哥哥看到哭泣的作者后，主动走过来帮忙，这是情节重大转折。哥哥态度的转变打破了两人长期以来的僵持局面，他帮助作者扶起自行车并指导骑车技巧，使作者逐渐掌握骑车方法。这一过程不仅是学骑车的关键步骤，更重要的是修复了兄弟关系，两人从敌对走向合作互助，体现亲情在困难时刻的力量，也让作者感受到哥哥的关爱。

12. 续写情节发展
    情节高潮与结局
    经过哥哥指导和自己练习，一小时后作者能熟练骑车并向妈妈展示，这是情节高潮。作者从沮丧到自豪，心情的巨大转变凸显学会骑车的成就感。同时，妈妈见证这一时刻，家庭关系在这一温馨场景中得到积极呈现。作者与哥哥关系的改善成为故事结局，让读者看到亲情在经历波折后的升华，也呼应前文作者认为学骑车经历背后有故事，这个故事就是亲情的成长与转变。

13. Part3范文呈现

14. 范文呈现
    I guess that was what caused my brother to come outside. I turned my face away, fearing he would tease me. Unexpectedly, he gently picked my bike up and gestured me over, “Get on it.” His determined look smoothed away my doubts. As he gripped the backseat, I got on the bike, took a deep breath and started to pedal, holding tightly onto the handlebars. During the whole process, we didn’t talk much. He simply offered a few necessary instructions at times. But never once did he shout at me, nor did he let me fall. His patient teaching proved efficient and I gradually got the hang of riding.

15. 范文呈现
    An hour later, I was showing off my riding skill to my mom. She was amazed to see me riding steadily around the yard. While sharing my learning experience with her in excitement, I noticed my brother standing at a distance smiling at me. I cast him an appreciative look and he nodded and then walked back into the house. From that day on, the sad pattern between us began to change. There were occasional conversations between us, filled with less embarrassment but increasing concern. I could feel a different kind of brotherly relationship slowly developing between us. I would always treasure that day as my favorite memory, the moment when I felt the best.

16. 升级版范文呈现
    I guess that was what caused my brother to come outside. He walked towards me slowly, his face expressionless at first. Then, seeing me crying, he sighed and picked up the bike. "Come on, I'll teach you." he said. With his help, I got on the bike again. This time, I felt more confident. My brother held the back of the bike firmly, running alongside me. After several tries, I finally managed to ride a short distance on my own. It was an amazing feeling! I turned around to see my brother smiling at me, which was a rare sight.

17. 升级版范文呈现
    An hour later, I was showing off my riding skill to my mom. I rode around in circles, my heart filled with pride. My mom clapped